I think i has very good with my actions and I think I could do better at my expression because when I compered mia's and main I sow that mia was so good at her expression I want to be like that too. So I am going to try and work on that and practice and get better.
I think this poem was better than the last one. But I don't think I said it with energy so next time I will practice more and say it with more energy.
Last time I did this I had a book in front of me so I wasn't prepared. I had only just published a bit of my poem and I wasn't impressed. I did not do as well and I didn't have as much time. This time I did a lot of better things. I think if I do this I can include actions and love. I think I did a better job though. I am happy that I finished this poem. I am kinda proud of this final production but I know I can do better. I hope we can do this for I enjoyed it a lot. It was an interesting change and fun subject.
The previous time we did our spoken poetry poems we didn't have that long to prepare them so that was one improvement for everyone. An improvement wich I noticed in my poem was that at parts the poem just didn't make sense.
I think this one is better than the one before because I used more expression and I looked happy but before I was looking board and I had lots of mistakes but what I think I can do better is speak louder and if I say a word I should do a long notice for example ssnakessssss that's how I'd say it.
I think i improved because
a) I had more time to work on my poem and memorize it
b) way more emotion in the way I spoke it
c) more abstract ( less real and more from the soul)
d)more poetic devices
all these helped my poem be the poem it would be but great poems don't just come out of nowhere so I owe inspiration for my poem to Yasmin who when reading her poem gave me an idea from the part of her poem "a beautiful site takes flight in front of my eyes in bright daylight". thank you Yasmin
I think I have improved by adding more interesting words, and by having more expression and attitude, by talking loud and clear not pausing too much, even though some of it was cut out (probably because I made some mistake that I can't remember) But all in all I think my second time performing was better than the first one.
I think i improved with my voice and enthusiasm /expression
i also feel like this poem was memorized well the first one i did not have a expression the second one i did.
I used a bit more expression and I used more energy, since I had more time to practice I did not stop in the middle. Miss Pearl helped me put more interesting words in my colour poem so I think I improved well with that too
I think spoke louder and I had more expression in my speech.I think because I memorized it I could speak quicker but also more clearer.
I think I have used more attitude and I used much more rhyme which again links to having the right attitude.I think I also memorized my poem but I looked up too much so I will try to improve to keep my contact on the camera.
My poem is not shoing
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